I did it! I joined the Patriots and found Kaede! I begged and pleaded with her to help me. I had to get Day to saftey I couldn't let them kill him. I told her I wanted to prove to the world that Day wasn't then one who killed my brother and that they was going to kill an somewhat innocent boy! Kaede was hesitant about it at first but then she came around and help me persuade the Patriots. It was working my plan aw going to work and I was going to get Day out. We talked to the Patriots Commander but he told us "Absolutly not ! Day may not be a killer but he has commited many other crimes and I won't let him live to commit another one." I couldn't believe it. I knew there was no way to get him to agree. Day was going to die.
Days Point Of View
The Commander came up to my cell. He looked annoyed... At me. That's wasn't good on my part. You never want the man in charge if your life to be annoyed with you. "You will be executed tomorrow instead of in two days due to annoyances. The sooner you're gone the better." I didn't say anything because for the first time I thought he was right. My mother already thought I was dead and that was good. Why not let it be true. A couple of hours passed and I started to daze off. All of a sudden I heard a ruckus it was my brother John he was standing infornt of me and told me that he would take my place instead of letting me die. "I can't let you do this" I said to John. He had a mask over his mouth. John said "Day, I'm sick I'm going to die and there's no need for you. Get back out there and live and continue to fight the Republic. Day, please put me out of my misery." I couldn't believe it! My brother was contagious, he was going to die alone he was so young I knew that it would be best to let him take my place but he was my brother I couldn't let him die. John told me that it wasn't up for discussion that he would take my place and even if he didn't he would still get one of the Gaurds to shoot him. At that moment we heard something it was a guard he saw John in my cell "intruder intruder" he shouted then five more Gaurds ran up to us holding us at gunpoint. The Commander slowly walked over to us "who is this we got here? John? Days brother!" He told us we were going to die tonight instead of tomorrow John was going to be executed for breaking out a fugitive and me of course trying to sneak out and all my recent crimes.
Junes Point of View
Kaede ran up to me "they are killing John and Day tonight! Now!!" I couldn't breathe I started running as fast as I could toward the room where they was going to kill them. Right as I got there they finish the prayer and started to pull the switch "nooooooo" I screamed. Days last word was "I love you June!" He was gone.
Days Point of View
She was the last person I saw. I died happy.
Junes Point of View
*two months later*
I'm back at Drake. I haven't acted up anymore I stay to myself and follow all the rules like my brother would have wanted. There are rumors about what happened but none are true and I can't bare to talk about it to correct them so I let the rumors spread. I came to the conclusion that's love is evil. Thomas loved me and killed my brother that I loved. And I ended up getting the boy that loved me killed. I blame myself for everyone's death. I wanted to make it right so I am going to follow in my brothers footsteps to make him proud. This was all for him anyways!
You clearly did a lot of work here, and I can definitely appreciate that aspect of it. I think your grammar definitely needs some improvement, and your writing style is a little informal for the needs of this assignment. However, overall, I think it is well done!
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